![]() ![]() I was pretty convinced that I was reading a sentence that was being drawn out due to unnecessarily laziness.Although I haven't watched the full scene, I think that the words would glide more if you just changed the style into an active voice with present tense. ![]() What I do know is the wording could be improved, and I wonder whether Zet is unaware that you can easily cut out a few words just by changing the tense or voice of sentence? One reason that I think it feels awkward may be because he over relies on what I will term as "past tense and passive voice constructions." Or maybe I'm actually talking about helping verbs, and I won't pretend to know what this problem is called. ![]() I'd like to know how many times he has proofread his own work? Although I haven't earned a blackbelt in grammar, and would love to take some classes to improve my writing, I can sometimes sense when something is amiss, or when Zet's writing is awkward even if I cannot say why. Until I saw the screenshots on the steam page, it hadn't occurred to me that even I could write much better than Zet on a technical level.and I certainly would try if I were paid to do so. ![]()
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